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Well I am looking to become a sports journalist but my skills are very raw but my ability earned me a very nice internship this summer. I will not always write on conventional matters but I hope the articles are educational and entertaining.


Florida State University is Quickly Becoming Center Fielder "U"

By Erik Johnson

Although college baseball is not a sport that is followed by many, it may be one of the more entertaining athletic events there is. The College World Series is one of the most exciting and unpredictable sporting events in the world of sports, and although Florida State is arguably the most prestigious college baseball program in the country, they have yet to taste the bittersweetness of the College World Series.

Florida States program has the most wins in division one history and has produced numerous Major League Stars. The quickly growing, spot light, position at Florida State is Center Field. JD Drew and Shane Robinson were both All-Americans but there is one that has caught my eyes recently, who may not have the resume as Drew and Robinson but has the talent to be every bit as good. Although he has gone through more ups and downs then the Alps this young gun has a chance to be special.

Ruairi O'Connor was just 5 years old when he knew that he wanted to attend Florida State University, and at that time his dreams were to play baseball and Quarterback for the Seminoles. Well as many of you may no his second dream was not accomplished but his first one certainly was. O'Connor was the number one prospect in the state of Illinois his Junior year in high school despite having a down season by his standards. He attended a prestigious high school baseball camp sponsored by Perfect Game training, and went up against stars like B.J Upton. O'Connor was the number 5 ranked catcher in the camp which is quiet an accomplishment for an athlete who didn't play catcher in high school, and wasn't projected to at Florida State either. Although he was the star of the state he underwent serious criticism his Senior year in high school.

O'Connor forwent his senior baseball season because Florida State had asked him to graduate early and come down to play baseball in the spring. This is not a common thing in College baseball, in fact it has only happened three other times and one of those times came the same year that O'Connor did it.

When he left early he was considered a trader by many of his high school teammates, but many didn't understand the accomplishment and compliment it was to be asked to come early. In his freshman season he struggled to adjust to the college life and allowed the game to play with his mind. He gradually lost playing time, and eventually people began to question his decision to leave early and began saying he wasn't ready for big time baseball yet. To this day he stands by his decision and doesn't regret a thing.

"It was a dream come true and I wouldn't change anything about it. I am playing baseball for the Florida State Seminoles and this has been my goal since I was a little kid."

By graduating high school early O'Connor shut down every shot he had about being drafted. He was projected as a 5th through 9th round draft, but at a position he hadn't really played, as a catcher.

O'Connor's sophomore season did not start the way he had planned. In a practice he went to make a diving catch and broke his wrist. He ended up taking a medical red shirt and had now had two major set backs in his career already. Between position changes, struggles at the plate, and his injury he knew he had a lot to overcome.

"I just need to get back to the basics and remember that this is just a game" he said.

Entering this season O'Connor had not guaranteed spot in the lineup and had no real position, but during the off season he worked on playing the outfield because it was the position that gave him the best chance of playing. When he reported to practice the coaches had a spot in Center Field because, the All-American, Shane Robinson had been drafted by the Cardinals. Although O'Connor was still raw at the position he fought to earn a spot in the starting lineup and the coach so far has stood by his decision.

Florida State Baseball is known for their winning tradition, and also for their lack of ability to win the big one. This team may be the best one they have if their young center fielder can continue his early success. O'Connor is hitting .353 on the young season, but it is his patience and timely hitting that is showing his coach why he recruited him. As this season goes on no one will expect O'Connor to be Shane Robinson, who hit over .400 in his junior season, but they are looking for him to continue to play up to his potential. O'Connor has the size and speed to be a star at the college and pro level, and although college baseball is not followed as closely as other sports, the spotlight will be on him and as long as he keeps his cool he should be able to shine and help to lead this team to their first college world series ever.


The grammar and spelling in this article is not perfect. I am just currently beginning to take journalism classes and as a writer I was always told to just write and worry about grammar second. Since I proof read all my stuff it is hard for me to catch simple mistakes. I would really like constructive criticism and compliments and comments on it. This is not on a topic that many no much about but I think College Baseball is an absolute blast and this kid was a very interesting story. My writing is a little raw because I am yet to take sports journalism classes but I love writing... Thanks guys I appreciate it and I will be posting one of these weekly.
 

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Best of luck to you. I used to be a journalist. Stay humble and work hard. There are two VERY talented journalists on here in Chris Yandek and SkinsRaj. Learn from them.:103631605
 

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I was told that by Seth about Skins might try to contact him. I have been doing this for a while and I have an internship with the Tribune this summer so I am pretty excited. I was the youngest person that applied and I luckily got it I feel. I have been writing since I was a kid but I have a ton of room to grow. And any help from guys like Skins would be greatly appreciated. This article isn't the greatest but I am just working on content and things like that and form. So sorry if it isn't great or is a little boring.
 

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And remember I'm only 19 so I have a lot of time and room to grow. GL guys and thanks.
 

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As I said at that young an age, stay humble and listen. Yandek is guy you should emulate- no ego and works his ass off. He get much respect from many around here.
 

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Always willing to listen about writing... that is why I am posting here... would like help as I have always wanted to get into the business. If either of them want to chime in that would be great. And seriously college baseball is fun to watch and that kid has a lot of potential and is a cool story...
 

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spent many years trying to break into the same field.

a few comments:

1) always let the quote speak for itself.

To this day he stands by his decision and doesn't regret a thing.

"It was a dream come true and I wouldn't change anything about it"

you've overpowered the quote. that's never good. simply say he 'stands by his decision' or something to that effect. leave the 'he doesn't regret a thing' part out of it. because he's going to say as much in the next line.


2) never, ever put 'as many of you may know ......'

very simply, never ASSUME anything. don't insult the intelligence of your readers. but by that same token, don't assume they know trivial stuff.

i'm a little frightened of the trader/traitor thing, but that's neither here nor there. content is important. it's somewhat strange. you have 'forwent' in your article, which is a word many people have no clue how to use correctly. but then you make some fairly silly errors right on the heels of it.

3) 'this is not a common thing in baseball ......'

always try to turn your negatives into positives. by this i mean don't tell us what it's NOT (which is common). tell us what it IS (which is rare, uncommon, infrequent, etc).
 

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i'd also seriously rework your opening paragraph. you're already telling the reader not to be interested.

"although college baseball is not a sport followed by many ........"

get rid of that. again tell us what college baseball and prop it up. don't put it down. it's going to take some reworking to make it a positive intro, but it's vital if you want to keep the reader's attention past the opening line.
 

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'no real position' is much too casual. it's very informal. try 'no true position'. or even 'no steady' or 'no everyday position'
 

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Yeah those are good points... I know the difference and that I used the wrong word and that is what is confusing... I just write it that way and then you don't pick up on it when you proof read it you know? That is why I need an editor... It is not a perfect article and I think all of your points are very good ones and I really really really appreciate them... I am just looking to get everyones opinions each week and I hope to get better as the week goes on... I agree, the number one thing you should do is grab the attention of the reader and I didn't do that I would say that was my biggest mistake...

Maybe something along the lines of...

Although it is one of the most exciting sports in the world, college baseball often goes unnoticed.

Or something like that.
 

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And many tell me I am very advance of a writer for my age but I make stupid silly mistakes. IDK I got a lot of work to do but this summer I am hoping will help greatly, and I am just getting into classes on journalism... I am only a sophomore so I got a lot of time to go... Just looking to learn and appreciate it. I have a long way to go... but at least someone sees something in me.... But I got to continue to grow. Thanks man
 

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Well Drew is in the MLB... and my problem there is that I can't go into these guys it takes away from my main focus which is O'Connor that is why i feel I can really only explain their greatness at the college level. I go slightly into Shane because he is not known yet but will be one day...
 

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themanej2001 said:
Yeah those are good points... I know the difference and that I used the wrong word and that is what is confusing... I just write it that way and then you don't pick up on it when you proof read it you know? That is why I need an editor... It is not a perfect article and I think all of your points are very good ones and I really really really appreciate them... I am just looking to get everyones opinions each week and I hope to get better as the week goes on... I agree, the number one thing you should do is grab the attention of the reader and I didn't do that I would say that was my biggest mistake...

Maybe something along the lines of...

Although it is one of the most exciting sports in the world, college baseball often goes unnoticed.

Or something like that.

not ideal. but much better. i'm not convinced that you have to make the concession that college baseball goes unnoticed though. try to put the emphasis squarely on the positives. because the article isn't about whether college baseball has a large following. it's not a comparative article (with bball or football).

it's about the kid.
 

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No Gyn don't take that out... I appreciate the critique seriously... I just can't afford to go into them in great detail... I know you can't assume anything as a reader but this article is more on O'Connor then it is JD Drew and Robinson... they are just what was there...
 

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Yeah I feel you... OK thanks guys I really appreciate it. Most weeks it will be on something that more no about... just thought this was an interesting story and that this kid deserved it because i understand the struggles of athletes...
 

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themanej2001 said:
Well Drew is in the MLB... and my problem there is that I can't go into these guys it takes away from my main focus which is O'Connor that is why i feel I can really only explain their greatness at the college level. I go slightly into Shane because he is not known yet but will be one day...

you dont have to go into depth. but you do have to explain who these people are to your reader.

'current dodgers' outfield j.d. drew, a formner all-american at fsu .....'

would work just fine.

note: i have no idea where the fu.ck drew is right now so insert his current team in there. he changes every damn year.
 

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yeah he is with the red sox... and yeah that is a good point should say something along those lines...

BTW just a random thing... watch that kid Shane Robinson he is in the Cardinals farm system... he is small but a very good baseball player
 

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